Monday, August 31, 2009

The Untitled Update

I wrote this tonight... I would love constructive criticism, or anything of the sort.

I am not sure where this came from, honestly, so I have no reasoning.... it was very sudden.




Blood dripping,
Skin parting,

Blades Flashing,
Shields banging,

Warriors slay,
Horses neigh,

Beasts fall,
People crawl,

Womens' tears fill the alter,
Mens' roars refuse to falter.

Animals' cries echo the night,
Quiet under stampedes of flight,

When will the battles end?
How can these minds mend?

Lost children fill under the darkened skies,
Crying as they lament saying their goodbyes.

1 comment:

  1. nice.............. sounds like a battle scene..... like a whispering narrative in the background as you see the scene play out silently before you

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